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Mehaha Admin
Posts : 765 Join date : 2010-04-23
| Subject: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Fri Nov 05, 2010 1:28 pm | |
| Names: Lorelei Montague AKA Queen Mab Alliance: FoF Appearance: - Spoiler:
Biographies: - Spoiler:
A woman from the village of Duxlet. She isn't some idol ETC. She is a girl with a not so normal upbringing. Her mother was the "Rapsum Ripper." A serial killer with a history of killing the men she married. She was the child of the last such dead husband. She isn't quite sure if she has brothers or sisters. As her mother gave her up at 5 years old. With the words "Your big enough and can hold a blade so prove you come from the line of Montague. The strongest, fastest and smartest lineage created." as a good bye. Causing her to have great pride in her family line. The Montagues a family whom possessed unsurpassed combat instincts.
Her father was a man named Lati Capulet. Though she doesn't care about him she still holds a lot in common with him. The house of Capulet also shares the same motto as the house of Montague "The Strongest, Fastest and Smartest." Lorelei has her fathers strength. A trait long passed down by the Capulets.
At the Age of 14 she was kidnapped by a Fatalis. He flew away with her to a castle. There she was asked a question. "Is undying loyalty to someone you may hate better than dying." She was curious as to how the Fatalis was sentiant and able to speak so she answered "No... Montagues never serve those whom we dislike... Only collect their heads!" She replied. The Fatalis then asked "Do you hate me the one whom kidnapped you then?" She responded "I don't know you so why would I... Your the same as me... I can even smells the pungent stench of human corpses on your fangs." She replied. And from then on she was a follower.
However her deceit know no bounds. She hates being under anyones command. She plans on killing that Fatalis as soon as she would get the opportunity. Some of her sweetest dreams are the ones when that Fatalis has his blood smeared on her blade. And she takes his place as commander of beasts. Kill Tally: Mostly people... Weapons: - Spoiler:
Longsword Whip "Oberon" A whip Sword. It's heavy and about 7ft long. A perfect weapon Queen Mab. However there is a huge weakness to it. When it splits into a whip it can be destroyed. The weakness is caused by it being made of one cord that goes all the way up then back down to the handle. So even though the cord is extremely strong a strong attack can cut one of them. And after one has been cut she can use the weapon one more time before it completely falls apart. Style: - Spoiler:
Strength!!!/Deceit/Viciousness/Sword-Whip Combos In most areas she's average. However don't let that cause you to think your safe. She's Hercules in a dress. If she tried she could lift a fully armored hunter with one hand and throw him through a wall. This monstrous strength applies to her sword attacks. To make matters worse with all this strength she isn't encumbered by the weight of her weapons she she wields it in a pretty agile manner.
She is amazingly deceiving. If her clothes weren't stain proof and easy to wash it'd be easier to see her true side. She doesn't seem evil at first glance so no one questions it. She is beautiful and not intimidating when in a non-combat situations. She even seems a bit motherly with a smile and a kindness so very rare. However this is all a Facade... A wonderfully played part by a brilliant actor. Someone once said a pretty face invites disaster and she's that face.
Her true self is vicious and cruel. With fine combat instincts. Hardly what you'd call a woman. When out for blood this is painfully obvious. If she holds your hand it's because she's trying to tear it off. If her lips meet your it's because she's trying to bit out you tongue. She her body is pressed against yours it's because her arms are wrapped around you as well breaking your insides. Even her clothing tells a grim tale. With leather made from babies and fabric made from the hair of the elderly. All reinforced with metal
To make matters worse she's spent a lot of time with her weapon. A sectional sword is a difficult weapon to master but she's done it. Switching from its whip and its sword properties is an easy task. And since her sword when in whip form has 3x it's original length it is a lot more dangerous then you'd think. Her style of continued assaults till she breaks the enemies weapon is not even planned out that way. She mostly is trying to hit the enemy and it happens accidentally. Special Modes: Leave blank for now. Charge Attacks: - Spoiler:
Name: Fairy Jihad فايري جيهاد
Requirements: Damaged Whip Sword
Description: Very simply you retract the blades. And then re-swing the weapon as hard as you can. Since the weapon is already broken it sends the sections of the whip sword flying forward. If lucky enough it'll cut a few people. However it is highly inaccurate against smaller targets like people.
Effect: None
Charge Time: The time it takes to retract the blades after it breaks. Designer's Notes: All her charge attacks and Special modes are gonna have an Arabic theme to them. And I'll be adding the Arabic names to them as well. No it's not a racist thing I just wanna try something different. Also her theme sing is Montagues and Capulets by Sergei Prokovief. and yes that's a link. Yes there are a lot of Romeo and Juliet references in the APP.
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Black Lagoon Moderators
Posts : 615 Join date : 2010-08-04 Age : 29 Location : Some Random, Unknown Place
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Tue Nov 09, 2010 6:20 pm | |
| The detail in this is overwhelming! Maybe you could add an attack where she wraps the whip around a monsters/humans leg to try and trip them up! | |
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Mehaha Admin
Posts : 765 Join date : 2010-04-23
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Tue Nov 09, 2010 6:53 pm | |
| I am very big on detail... If you ever want to put a lot of detail into your APPs but the character limit gets in your way let me know and I'll combine the multiple posts so it isn't a problem.
Also... I was thinking about that BUT the blades are huge and just tugging after it wraps may do worse then just tripping. | |
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Tobakado G- Rank Hunter
Posts : 891 Join date : 2009-07-17 Age : 34 Location : Somewhere in the middle of nowhere
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Wed Nov 10, 2010 9:00 pm | |
| I have a feeling that this is based off more than R&J. Its a personal paranoia on well developed characters. I understand that all characters are based on (or coincidently off) another characters. I do it too. Its where a character that is ENTIRELY a copy of another is where I have a problem. I am not saying that this is based off another or not... My paranoia is based off my unknown source of ignorance of what idea it may be based off of.
Does this make sense?
Anyhow other than that. I have no problem
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Mehaha Admin
Posts : 765 Join date : 2010-04-23
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Thu Nov 11, 2010 1:44 am | |
| It makes sense... It's based on the description of Queen Mab done by Mercutio in Romeo and Juliet... Queen Mab is the queen of the fairies and causes war as well as her using a whip ETC. I can see where you'ld get that though. I chose a whip sword because it can break in a vary unique way. That combined with the fact that it still is a sharply bladed weapon. I plan on making follow-up attacks for after the weapon is broken. | |
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Mehaha Admin
Posts : 765 Join date : 2010-04-23
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Wed Jan 26, 2011 5:47 am | |
| I removed the WIP tag... Also I changed my mind... This'll be an NPC. Because I don't want the character anymore but I don't want the concept either. | |
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Drakina Admin
Posts : 220 Join date : 2010-06-21 Age : 27 Location : Turn around and find out - if not I hope you enjoy the taste of a blade.
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Sat Jan 29, 2011 2:39 am | |
| lol who started up the fairy strip club? | |
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Mehaha Admin
Posts : 765 Join date : 2010-04-23
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Sat Jan 29, 2011 3:10 pm | |
| Ok... I don't get the relevance... I just prefer that photo cuz it goes well with the description..
Anyways I posted my interest in this character now just waiting for mod critique and approval or a request for revision. | |
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Abel X Admin
Posts : 349 Join date : 2011-02-09 Age : 30 Location : Spain, in Costa Del Sol
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Sun Feb 13, 2011 4:15 pm | |
| I like very much this character, you really made a complex and interesting character, although it looks pretty much like Maya (but 10 times better, also, I know that you will know how to make it unique) I would approve it, but I'm not a mod.
Also, I must admit that Ratho is right, LOL. | |
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Abel X Admin
Posts : 349 Join date : 2011-02-09 Age : 30 Location : Spain, in Costa Del Sol
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Fri Mar 04, 2011 4:19 pm | |
| Wonderful song, I love it! The only bad thing is that I was planing to use it as the theme song of one of my characters... lol. | |
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Tobakado G- Rank Hunter
Posts : 891 Join date : 2009-07-17 Age : 34 Location : Somewhere in the middle of nowhere
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Sat Mar 05, 2011 11:37 pm | |
| I need to redo Maya, She was done when this forum was barely off the ground, the comprendium wasnt even MADE at that point...
What did you change Mehaha? I thought this was already approved? | |
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Mehaha Admin
Posts : 765 Join date : 2010-04-23
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Sun Mar 06, 2011 5:41 pm | |
| You never actually said it was approved just that you had no problems with it... | |
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Abel X Admin
Posts : 349 Join date : 2011-02-09 Age : 30 Location : Spain, in Costa Del Sol
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Sun Mar 06, 2011 5:47 pm | |
| well, if no one has any problem then I think that you can move this to the approved section (after all, any of the replies say anything bad about your character. Oh, and with this NPC, you are wining me (2 NPCs created by Abel - 3 NPCs created by Mehaha) lol). | |
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Mehaha Admin
Posts : 765 Join date : 2010-04-23
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Sun Mar 06, 2011 6:09 pm | |
| I guess... If Toba doesn't agree he can move it back. Also those RPCs were originally RP characters. | |
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Tobakado G- Rank Hunter
Posts : 891 Join date : 2009-07-17 Age : 34 Location : Somewhere in the middle of nowhere
| Subject: Re: Lorelei "Queen Mab" Montague Sun Mar 06, 2011 9:58 pm | |
| Ill guess Ill finalize the approval then... moved to NPC approved section | |
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